A lot of the revisioning was looking at sentences where the words did not make sense or sounded quite weird. There was not really any additions in a sense besides moving a couple of words around. A lot of it was more of compressing certain parts of a sentence or replacing or having an idea of replacing words that may fit the essay overall. There was some portions that ddi not need the a change which was when the essay dove into the possible bias of the author. In reality though I thought perhaps and probably for the best if the whole essay was to be rewritten for a better overall experience.